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    “Dissolution”

    I do not doubt
    your Socratic mouth.
    Your voice travels like molten gold over rivulets of thought;
    the words warmly unspooling
    like wisps of smoke stroking my throat, my eyes
    before they arrive home.

    Two-dimensional
    incomprehensible,
    but it's all I have of you, in the end.
    The flat glass, dull lull, inveterate stare
    your facsimile burns through me like an excimer.
    I am un-pieced
    yet again.

    Picasso-an,
    multi-colored,
    my body slides apart like a brick of butter left out too long.
    First my arms, then my knees slip and come apart,
    and the head rolls sideways like a wheel of cheese.
    Nothing's left but soft ruin and a pooling heart,
    gasping like a fish.

    Fallible, malleable
    but deitific.
    I see you witness my dissolution, immobile and indifferent
    --but are you?
    I detect subtle movements of subterranean feelings
    gliding along like wary sharks,
    unable to submerge, but afraid to emerge
    and face me.

    Am I beautiful now
    --Sunk, spread, and sparkling beneath a mile of sun-smile?
    I can and will forgive you
    even for this,
    for letting me spill apart, wide as a crime scene,
    basking in your stillness, your silence;
    your unintentional
    violence






    "The Mind's Instruction Manual"

    Wrestling with fate
    a god unknown
    you have a mind, your dreams there
    move faster
    guide yourself
    don't lose it
    don't change
    seize your gifts
    don't take away your fate
    a mind in season
    ask the wall
    ask an angel
    ask a friend
    lose your spirit
    don't lose your mind
    a gift with no clues
    seize an unguarded foe

    they can't hear the ticking watch
    the numbers make no sense
    away from the structured environment
    live it
    dream it
    can't ask the wind
    the bears don't respond
    football on the edge of a cliff
    a mountain asks the time
    right back where I started from
    hold it
    shake it
    mold it
    hold it again
    drop your sky
    feel your eye's pain
    sense the elderberry
    move a nice change
    ask again
    angels can't climb walls
    make a move
    seize a superficial countenance
    dream an unguarded escape into madness
    envision a martyr on the other side of the world

    don't try
    just be
    seize an instrument of power
    make an uncharted experiment shine
    feel a loss in only one way
    protect against repitition of loss
    don't end an old one
    be the young that you crave
    make that flower an indescribable centerpiece
    foil the unplans of your dreams
    ask the martyr for change
    bring a dandelion to a field of daffodils
    find the duck among the geese
    see the janitor among the movie stars

    grand dreams that fly
    don't let them leave
    feel your mind's last gasp of air
    heed the call of the boom
    shape the stars
    don't let them shape you
    make a fold in time
    go back on those memories
    ignore the pain in hand
    hear the silence of the watch
    as the two to twenty-three
    becomes the call to drift into sleep

    feed that hunger
    don't heed the imperatives that mean giving up
    make a start
    end a finish
    hide an uncharted guide of fools
    make no dreams that can't let walls in
    angels swim without the sides
    lose the ends
    defeat the means
    ask a dreamer for the time
    don't lose the kisses of the almighty who see
    their old dreams were part of your future
    those cities will beg for you back
    you claimed your own power
    now use it
    damn the ones who would stand in your way
    make them pay
    it's not your guide
    make them see
    don't pay the wage

    sift through a rug
    feel a mindless gaze
    see the eyes that could see yours
    observe the walk that is so beautiful
    a wholeness that screams at you in laughter
    mocking your dreams
    the hair of the wise flows in your heart
    tame the boom
    end the savior
    feel a mind's view
    take a stab at the pair of eyelids
    don't shake the retreating visions
    lose your endless prize
    seize a martyr in your haystack's needle
    feel a gold watch in your only rhythm
    sense a dream that guides the pen
    seize a symptom

    try
    make
    fight
    don't lose that guide
    they know you
    they knew you all along
    I don't realize their power
    I've already exhausted my talents
    now it's up to you
    only you can find the means to dream
    the mind's vision of life
    guide yourself
    let the animals free
    let the scorpion and the ram battle
    the fool and the eye
    and the bull not be stubborn
    when you ask for an idea
    a fleeting glance that fades
    can the lion have caused the guilt and dejection?

    dream this again
    find a guide
    test a moment
    dream your eyes in snow
    find a mindless child
    feed an undaunted heart
    ask not your fate
    make it what lies in your mind
    seize that one last touch
    the pouring out of the boom
    that sensitive universe
    and an incredible sensation of being can be yours
    if you guide it within your body
    let that mind out and smack the opposition
    clobber the cretins
    blind the fools
    kill the thieves of your dreams
    buy back your heart from the merchants
    punch the eyes of the opposition
    take the mind
    take the heart
    take the walk
    take the hair
    take your eyes
    grab the boom
    pour it out in a pool of sweat
    squeeze the pain out with a dream
    end the sense
    lose your fear
    but keep your grip
    til the great explosion of the moment.

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    Poll closes in 8 days.
    "To find beauty in loss, hope in darkness."

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    vote vote vote vote vote vote vote


    thanks
    "To find beauty in loss, hope in darkness."

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    Good stuff.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Jeffster View Post
    Good stuff.
    I love that you quote me in your sig. hehe.

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    FREE VERSE? *barf*

    *reads ladyjaye's poetry to return sense of verbal aesthetics to consciousness*

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    A appealed, B was too much like a list.

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    Quote Originally Posted by pippi View Post
    B was too much like a list.
    That's the idea.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Nihilen View Post
    That's the idea.
    Maybe it will appeal to S's.

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    Quote Originally Posted by penelope View Post
    I love that you quote me in your sig. hehe.
    It's a great quote.
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