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Old 04-30-2007, 01:58 AM   #9 (permalink)
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SW, please -- less essay, more easily personable prose. (Well, you can feel free to do what you want, but I don't have the time nor energy to comb through all this, hoping to find some gems in the rough.)

Just using more paragraph breaks and simpler prose would really help. One small example:
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Originally Posted by SolitaryWalker View Post
As far as the feminist assertion that the Bible fails to honor egalitarianism is concerned, a meta-ethical approach can be taken to give this phenomenon a fair treatment.
You could rewrite the first part as "While feminists claim the Bible does not support gender equality" ... and I have no clue what the hell you mean by the second part. Anyway... Just advice.

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Originally Posted by rivercrow View Post
o a lesser extent, I believe the categorical imperative informs our society and social interactions. There you see the basis of my value system.
RC, I agree with much of what you have said here. Sorry for my ignorance, but what exactly is a "categorical imperative"? (I don't know the lingo yet, sorry). Thanks.
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